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Band 5.0CEFR B1Task 2236 words

In the future all cars, buses and truck will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

The essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear position, but suffers from frequent grammatical errors, awkward collocations, spelling mistakes, and punctuation issues like ...

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Prompt

In the future all cars, buses and truck will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay review

Annotated essay

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The world is changing rapidly, this includes the transportation system in various cities. In the soon future, the need for drivers to drive vehicles, will be something from the past. Driveerless system will be considered, and will replace the classic way of traveling. This altration may have some benefitis and drawbacks, which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

To begin with the advantages of shifting to driverless vehicles, it is obvious, that traffic in urban areas will significantly reduced. This will be achieved, due to the fact that these machines are provided by artificial intelligence, capable of determining booth the speed and the distance of the trip. In addition, travelling will be definitely safer, since it will eliminate the factor of human errors on highways. Also, this step canavoid terrified accidents caused by unconscious drivers, driving under high alcohol consumption.

However, this develop in transportation system may have some disadvantages, including the loss of job opportunities in this feild. This replacement will lead to a situation which is hard on truck and buses drivers, who will be no longer needed for their services. Also. some individuals who consider driving as a method of entertaining, will be negatvely impacted. Such a change will kill their passion in driving

In conclusion, I argue that the benefits of shifting to a driverless vehicles outweigh its drawbacks, as safe roads is a priority for any city in the world.

Improvement plan

Close to Band 5.5

Current Band 5.0

Target Band 5.5

  • Fewer spelling errors across content words.
  • Better control over sentence boundaries, eliminating comma splices.
  • More accurate collocations and reduced reliance on basic phrasing.

Strengths

Task Response

The conclusion clearly restates the writer's position and summarizes the overall stance established in the introduction.

Weaknesses

Punctuation and Comma Splice Errors

High

The essay contains comma splices and intrusive commas separating subjects from their verbs, indicating weak control over sentence boundaries.

Spelling and Word Formation Density

High

Numerous spelling mistakes across content words ('Driveerless', 'altration', 'benefitis', 'terrified', 'feild', 'negatvely') detract from lexical quality.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Eliminate Spelling and Word Formation ErrorsThere are numerous spelling errors throughout the essay ('Driveerless', 'benefitis', 'feild', 'negatvely') that lower the Lexical Resource score. Practicing correct spelling and word forms will significantly improve readability.Impact: High
  2. 2Improve Sentence Boundary Control and PunctuationThe essay frequently uses comma splices and incorrect punctuation between subjects and verbs. Learning proper clause coordination and punctuation rules will elevate the Grammatical Range and Accuracy score.Impact: High
  3. 3Expand Lexical Range and CollocationsThe essay relies on basic vocabulary and awkward collocations like 'soon future' and 'method of entertaining'. Incorporating precise academic collocations will enhance the quality of the writing.Impact: Medium

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 5.0

B1

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear position, but suffers from frequent grammatical errors, awkward collocations, spelling mistakes, and punctuation issues like comma splices. While the structure is clear with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, the lack of accurate sentence boundaries and restricted lexical range limit the score to 5.0.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • Attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'transportation system', 'artificial intelligence', and 'job opportunities'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent spelling errors ('Driveerless', 'altration', 'benefitis', 'terrified', 'feild', 'negatvely').
  • Limited lexical range with awkward phrasing ('method of entertaining', 'classic way of traveling').

Justification

Lexical resource is limited by noticeable spelling errors and unnatural collocations, placing the response firmly in the Band 5 range.

Writing stats

Words
236
Paragraphs
4
Estimated time
2 min read
Grammar issues
6
Lexical suggestions
5
Major issues
15
Minor issues
4
Top error pattern
Spelling Inaccuracies
Confidence
High