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Band 4.0CEFR B1Essay63 words

Compared to past, more people are now trying to learn a foreign language to increase their chances of landing a better job in their native country or to have better opportunities to work abroad. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

The response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, consisting only of a short introductory fragment that fails to answer the task prompt. It exhibits frequent grammatical e...

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Prompt

Compared to past, more people are now trying to learn a foreign language to increase their chances of landing a better job in their native country or to have better opportunities to work abroad. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

Essay review

Annotated essay

Interactive

There is no denying the fact that improving your qualifications will impact your career positively. While it is a commonly held belief that studying a foreign languages will boost their chances to secure a better job, eather, in their native country or in another foreign country; there also an argument opposes it.

However, this essay will discuss the reasons and state my opinine.

Improvement plan

Close to Band 4.5

Current Band 4.0

Target Band 4.5

  • Write a complete essay of at least 250 words with proper body paragraphs.
  • Reduce basic spelling and grammatical errors.
  • Maintain clear sentence boundaries without major punctuation lapses.

Strengths

No strengths listed.

Weaknesses

Severe Incompleteness

High

The essay is only two sentences long and completely lacks body paragraphs, examples, or a reasoned discussion.

Sentence Boundary and Punctuation Breakdown

High

Incorrect use of semicolons and commas creates ungrammatical clause structures and fragments.

Spelling and Word Formation Errors

Medium

Basic spelling mistakes such as 'eather' and 'opinine' detract from the writing quality.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Develop Full Body ParagraphsThe essay currently stops after two sentences. Writing complete body paragraphs with topic sentences, explanations, and concrete examples is essential to address the task response requirements.Impact: High
  2. 2Improve Grammatical Accuracy and Sentence BoundariesEliminating missing verbs, article errors, and incorrect punctuation marks will significantly improve readability and grammatical scores.Impact: High

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 4.0

B1

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, consisting only of a short introductory fragment that fails to answer the task prompt. It exhibits frequent grammatical errors, severe punctuation and sentence boundary problems, and very basic vocabulary. Task response is extremely limited due to the lack of body paragraphs and a clear position.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • No strengths listed.

Weaknesses

  • The essay is extremely short and cuts off before presenting any body paragraphs or an argument.
  • The introduction mentions that there is an argument opposing the trend, but it never develops either side of the issue.
  • The thesis statement is vague and fails to state a clear personal position on the extent of agreement.

Justification

Fails to meet minimum length expectations for a full discussion and completely lacks body paragraphs and substantive task coverage, corresponding to Band 4.0.

Writing stats

Words
63
Paragraphs
2
Estimated time
1 min read
Grammar issues
4
Lexical suggestions
3
Major issues
6
Minor issues
0
Top error pattern
Basic Spelling Errors
Confidence
High
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