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Band 4.5CEFR B1Essay98 words

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at an alarming rate. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions?

The essay is incomplete and breaks off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph. It demonstrates very limited task completion, repetitive vocabulary, and frequent grammatical e...

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Prompt

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at an alarming rate. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions?

Essay review

Annotated essay

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Climate change is one of the greatest issues earth is confronting today. We have more summers than winters, and this is because of the increase in degree of temperature. This esay shall discuss about the troubles connected with global warming and some plausible solutions that might help to deal with the problems.

To begin with, one considerable trouble related to global warming and rise of sea levels is the threat of flooding in coastal zones. There is a possibility to loss of natural habitat including humans and a myriad species. This also leads to exacerbating biodiversity loss and

Improvement plan

Close to Band 5.5

Current Band 4.5

Target Band 5.5

  • A fully completed essay containing both problems and solutions
  • A concluding paragraph summarizing the stance
  • Fewer basic grammatical and spelling errors

Strengths

Task Response

The writer attempts to outline the essay structure in the introduction, showing awareness of task requirements.

Weaknesses

Incomplete Essay and Missing Solutions

High

The essay cuts off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph and completely fails to discuss the requested solutions.

Frequent Grammatical and Lexical Errors

High

The text contains multiple spelling, prepositional, and article errors that impede smooth reading.

Absence of Conclusion

High

Due to incomplete writing, there is no concluding paragraph to summarize the stance.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Complete the Essay and Address All Prompt RequirementsThe essay is incomplete and fails to discuss solutions entirely. Writing a full response with body paragraphs covering both problems and solutions is essential to achieve a higher task response score.Impact: High
  2. 2Improve Grammatical Accuracy and Eliminate Spelling ErrorsFixing frequent errors regarding articles, prepositions, and spelling will significantly improve the overall accuracy of the writing.Impact: Medium

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 4.5

B1

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The essay is incomplete and breaks off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph. It demonstrates very limited task completion, repetitive vocabulary, and frequent grammatical errors such as spelling mistakes and incorrect prepositional usage. A higher band requires a full response with proper paragraph development and accurate grammar.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • The introduction identifies both parts of the prompt (problems and solutions).

Weaknesses

  • The essay is severely incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph.
  • Solutions are mentioned in the introduction but never actually discussed in the body paragraphs.
  • Development of ideas is extremely minimal.

Justification

The response is incomplete and fails to address all parts of the prompt adequately due to truncation, earning a band 4.0 for Task Response.

Writing stats

Words
98
Paragraphs
2
Estimated time
1 min read
Grammar issues
2
Lexical suggestions
10
Major issues
4
Minor issues
2
Top error pattern
Missing Article and Determiner Errors
Confidence
High
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