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Band 4.5CEFR B1Task 2297 words

IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LINE IN. WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?

The response addresses both parts of the prompt with relevant ideas, but the organization is loose and repetitive, lacking clear paragraph progression. Lexical range is limited,...

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Prompt

IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LINE IN. WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?

Essay review

Annotated essay

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There are many houses that have been standing for numerous years. These historic buildings additionally serve as a reminder of how many people resided in them and what kind of taste do those people carried , and for what purpose does the house was constructed , and also whether it serves only as a housing for people or it carries other secrets with it. These old dwellings also describe how individuals have used the old equipment.

Today, many people have become interested in finding out the history of their homes or if they are purchasing an old residence. The reasons could be that they wanted to discover about their forefathers, where they originated from , and why did they built the house in this location. Moreover, how many materials are utilised in the dwelling. Furthermore, what kind of technologies have been utilised in the building to carry out daily life tasks.

Folks can research about their residence by asking around the neighbourhood additionally they can go to the city centre and research their family tree if they have lived there for generations. However, if they are new to the premises, they can research about the initial owner of the dwelling , which can give an idea of how old it is. On the other hand, research can be done online because of technological advancements and this could also help to know about the amount of renovations does the house has undergone.

In conclusion, this is regarded as a personal interest if people want to know about the history of their resting building or place and can use tools that allow them to totally understand about the materials. As new technologies are arriving, there may be a time when folks can check about their home by scanning them.

Improvement plan

Close to Band 5.0

Current Band 4.5

Target Band 5.0

  • Consistent use of complete sentences without major structural fragments.
  • Accurate formation of dependent clauses and avoidance of auxiliary errors in statements.
  • More natural academic vocabulary and reduced reliance on conversational terms.

Strengths

No strengths listed.

Weaknesses

Persistent Indirect Question and Tense Errors

High

The essay frequently misuses interrogative word order and tense forms inside dependent clauses, severely lowering grammatical accuracy.

Lack of Idea Extension

High

Main ideas are stated as brief assertions or lists of questions rather than being supported by detailed explanations and specific examples.

Mechanical and Repetitive Cohesion

Medium

The essay relies heavily on repetitive sentence-initial transition words without achieving smooth logical flow between paragraphs.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Eliminate Sentence Fragments and Improve Clause StructureSeveral sentences in the body paragraphs are written as incomplete fragments starting with interrogative pronouns or transitional words. Converting these into complete clauses will significantly raise grammatical range and accuracy.Impact: High
  2. 2Master Indirect Question Word OrderThe essay repeatedly misuses auxiliary verbs and question word order inside dependent noun clauses (e.g., 'why did they built', 'does the house has undergone'). Fixing this pattern will resolve multiple major grammar errors.Impact: High
  3. 3Expand Academic Vocabulary and RegisterReplacing informal terms like 'Folks' and unnatural collocations with precise academic vocabulary and standard collocations will improve Lexical Resource.Impact: Medium

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 4.5

B1

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The response addresses both parts of the prompt with relevant ideas, but the organization is loose and repetitive, lacking clear paragraph progression. Lexical range is limited, with frequent reliance on basic words and informal conversational expressions ('Folks'). Grammatical control is weak, characterized by repeated tense shifts, frequent errors in interrogative word order used as noun clauses, and punctuation issues such as comma splices.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • Attempts some complex structures using relative pronouns and subordinate clauses.

Weaknesses

  • Persistent structural errors in indirect questions (e.g., 'what kind of taste do those people carried', 'why did they built').
  • Frequent tense inconsistencies and awkward passive constructions ('does the house has undergone').
  • Punctuation lapses, including comma splices and incorrect spacing around commas.

Justification

Grammatical control is weak, with frequent major errors across simple and complex sentences that frequently obscure meaning, supporting a Band 4.0.

Writing stats

Words
297
Paragraphs
4
Estimated time
3 min read
Grammar issues
12
Lexical suggestions
4
Major issues
9
Minor issues
7
Top error pattern
Incorrect Interrogative Word Order in Dependent Clauses
Confidence
High