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Band 3.5CEFR A2Essay137 words

More and more people are buying fashionable clothes these days. Does it have more negative or positive effects? Give reasons for your answers and include examples relevant to your experience.

The essay falls significantly short of the task requirements due to severe grammatical breakdowns, incoherent sentence structures, and an incomplete response that trails off mid...

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Prompt

More and more people are buying fashionable clothes these days. Does it have more negative or positive effects? Give reasons for your answers and include examples relevant to your experience.

Essay review

Annotated essay

Interactive

There is no denying the fact that purchasing fresh garments is a necessity in the life. This essay will discuss in the present time individuals are looking for fashionable clothes and whether this trend has positive or negative effects. To begin with, there are many reasons for people are prefer buying a fast fashion clothes. Firstly, we can start by saying that is bring more satisfication and confidence for the personality. In other words, most of the people they like to be trendy may cause more satisfied. In addition, before any season the shops start to prepared the color schema and, every one looking for trending in clothes by this store. For example, if the winter season is coming the shopping area offer dark colours such as black, dark red, and navy blue. In terms of reasons

Improvement plan

Close to Band 4.5

Current Band 3.5

Target Band 4.5

  • A complete essay structure with a proper conclusion
  • Fewer basic grammatical and spelling errors
  • Clearer sentence boundaries and logical transitions

Strengths

No strengths listed.

Weaknesses

Incomplete Response and Trailing Off

High

The essay cuts off abruptly at the end without addressing both sides fully or providing a conclusion.

Pervasive Grammatical Instability

High

Severe errors in subject-verb agreement, verb forms, and clause structures obstruct communication.

Severe Disjointedness and Logical Breakdown

High

Sentences lack logical cohesion, containing multiple ungrammatical connectors and broken clauses.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Complete the Essay StructureEnsure that the essay includes fully developed body paragraphs and a complete concluding summary rather than trailing off.Impact: High
  2. 2Eliminate Basic Grammatical BreakdownWork on subject-verb agreement, verb forms after infinitives/auxiliaries, and avoiding double subjects.Impact: High

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 3.5

A2

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The essay falls significantly short of the task requirements due to severe grammatical breakdowns, incoherent sentence structures, and an incomplete response that trails off mid-sentence. It demonstrates very limited control over simple and complex structures, recurrent lexical repetition, and basic errors throughout.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • Occasional simple clauses are recognizable despite errors.

Weaknesses

  • Pervasive grammatical errors including severe subject-verb mismatches ('reasons for people are prefer'), tense misuse, and fused fragments.
  • Failure to construct accurate complex sentences.
  • Widespread misuse of auxiliary verbs and prepositions.

Justification

Grammar is heavily flawed throughout, with frequent structural breakdowns, double subjects ('most of the people they like'), and ungrammatical verb forms that impede comprehension.

Writing stats

Words
137
Paragraphs
1
Estimated time
2 min read
Grammar issues
9
Lexical suggestions
3
Major issues
9
Minor issues
2
Top error pattern
Subject-Verb Agreement and Auxiliary Misuse
Confidence
High