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Band 5.5CEFR B2Task 2289 words

Some believe buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose rather than just look beautiful. Others, however, say buildings should represent art too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The essay addresses both views regarding the purpose and aesthetic value of buildings and presents a clear personal opinion. However, it suffers from frequent grammatical errors...

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Prompt

Some believe buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose rather than just look beautiful. Others, however, say buildings should represent art too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay review

Annotated essay

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In modern society, housing plays a vital role in people’s standard of living. It is a controversial topic whether simple house with basic amenities is beneficial or decroative builidings are far-reaching. Although simple house is afforadable, I strongly believe that buildings with art broaden individuals’ horizon.

The compelling factor of building with an architectural designs is that it allows individuals to create an imagination skills. Many people tend to feel not only stress but also tired after hectic shedule, so decorating wall pictures driven them to develop habit of drawings. In the long run, it enhances thinking skills and also makes peaceful environment in the house which faclitates to boost emotional wellbeing. For instance, many urban cities in an Indian houses are often contructed with the paintings and carvings based on customers choice, that expand their knowledge of paintings and also enhance their cultrual value. Therefore, buidling with wall paintings allows individuals to gain insights into art.

Despite the fact that architectural houses boost customers innovative skills, many assert that simple houses contribute to live budget friendly. This is primarily because, many low-income families are more likely to struggles to maintain their living expenses, thereby, constructing cost-effective houses with fulfilling their purpose reduces prices on materials. Consequently this approach allows everyone to deserves a basic standard of living. For instance, many families from countrysides live in just a spacious houses fulfilling their basic necessitis of living, which allows them to maintain their healthy diet. Thus, adopting this approach enables people to strengthen physical and mental wellbeing.

In conclusion, even though simple houses are cheaper and improves quality of life, I strongly believe that house with arts boraden individuals’ creativity and innovative ideas. Ultimately, it builds prosperous and sustainable society.

Improvement plan

Close to Band 6.0

Current Band 5.5

Target Band 6.0

  • Fewer basic grammatical errors across simple and complex sentences
  • Consistent spelling accuracy in content words
  • More precise and natural vocabulary collocations

Strengths

Task Response

The introduction clearly establishes the writer's personal stance on the issue.

Coherence

The body paragraph opens with a clear topical focus introducing the first viewpoint.

Weaknesses

Persistent Grammatical Inaccuracies

High

Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, verb forms, and article usage lower the grammatical score.

Spelling and Word Formation Issues

High

Numerous spelling mistakes across content words disrupt the flow and indicate limited lexical control.

Underdeveloped Arguments

Medium

Body paragraph arguments rely on unpersuasive assertions and logical leaps rather than solid reasoning.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Eliminate Grammatical Errors and Article LapsesReview basic grammar rules regarding subject-verb agreement, verb complementation after infinitives/prepositions, and article usage to prevent frequent errors.Impact: High
  2. 2Improve Spelling and Vocabulary PrecisionAddress frequent spelling errors in content words and expand vocabulary beyond repetitive basic terms.Impact: High
  3. 3Strengthen Task Response DevelopmentEnsure body paragraphs present clear, logical reasoning backed by robust and realistic examples rather than unsupported assertions.Impact: Medium

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 5.5

B2

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses both views regarding the purpose and aesthetic value of buildings and presents a clear personal opinion. However, it suffers from frequent grammatical errors, awkward word choices, spelling mistakes, and issues with coherence and task response depth. The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and many sentences lack precision or grammatical accuracy.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • Attempts to use topic-relevant vocabulary such as 'architectural designs', 'aesthetic', and 'amenities'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent spelling errors ('decroative', 'builidings', 'afforadable', 'shedule', 'cultrual', 'buidling') impair readability.
  • Repetitive use of basic vocabulary and non-standard collocations ('create an imagination skills', 'contribute to live budget friendly').

Justification

The vocabulary is limited, with noticeable spelling and word formation errors that frequently require rereading, corresponding to Band 5.0.

Writing stats

Words
289
Paragraphs
4
Estimated time
3 min read
Grammar issues
15
Lexical suggestions
5
Major issues
17
Minor issues
10
Top error pattern
Missing Articles and Singular/Plural Errors
Confidence
High