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Band 5.5CEFR B2Essay383 words

Some people believe that climate affects the person’s way of life while others believe that climate has greater impact on the economy of a region. Discuss both view and give your opinion

The essay addresses both views regarding the impact of climate on lifestyle versus the economy and provides a clear opinion. However, it is marred by frequent grammatical errors...

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Prompt

Some people believe that climate affects the person’s way of life while others believe that climate has greater impact on the economy of a region. Discuss both view and give your opinion

Essay review

Annotated essay

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It is frequently argued that climate have vital impact on people's lifestyle, while a bunch of people thinks that it's true, others claim that economy of the region is more dependent on it. This essay will discuss both views and argue that climate have more to do with human than economy. While explaining that people's lifestyle correlates with financial state of the country.

To begin with, it is well-known that humanity is strongly dependent on climate. People from mild regions are able to be outdoors comfortably throughout the year. For example, California is largely associated with different types of aerobic activities, such as surfing, cycling, running and etc. These activities are barely possible outdoor in the cold countries at winter, making areas with warm climate much more convenient. At the same time, in regions like Alaska, locals have poor pull of hobbies, and they're mostly tied with ice or snow like hockey or skiing. Another key thing is absence of the sunny days and constant negative temperatures. It is statistically proven, that those from Scandinavian countries are less resistant to depression and have less social contacts. All of this leads to even bigger social isolation, dramatically decreasing average happiness index.

Other group believes that economy is more climate reliant than humans do. Firstly, when the region is flooded with snow, governments have to spend extra money on maintaining the cities. It mostly includes salaries for workers who clean the streets, additional equipment and cleaning chemicals. Another key thing is logistics, supporting such regions with provision and medical supplements is very difficult. For example, there is a city in Russia called Norilsk, it is very far from centers and has extremely cold climate. This city suffered from climate disasters many times in the past. No humanitarian help were provided in time, due to the distance and absence of the roads. It all shows how much problematic can be sustaining the places where climate is rough.

Overall, although economy impact perspective have solid points, i agree with the one that sticks with affect on human lifestyle. It explains how climate affects a person more than an economy, by explaining how surroundings change people's behavior. For this reason, individuals are the ones that was impacted by climate but also, change in their behavior directly affects economy

Improvement plan

Close to Band 6.0

Current Band 5.5

Target Band 6.0

  • Fewer basic grammatical errors, especially in subject-verb agreement.
  • Consistently complete sentences without fragments.
  • More formal and natural academic vocabulary.

Strengths

Task Response

The introduction clearly outlines both views and presents a discernible writer's stance.

Weaknesses

Subject-Verb Agreement Errors

High

Recurring errors in matching singular subjects with plural verbs (e.g., 'climate have') lower the grammatical accuracy score.

Informal and Unnatural Phrasing

Medium

The use of colloquial expressions ('a bunch of people') and unnatural collocations ('poor pull of hobbies') reduces lexical precision.

Sentence Fragments

Medium

Starting dependent clauses as independent sentences disrupts clause structure and hurts punctuation control.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Eliminate Subject-Verb Agreement ErrorsErrors like 'climate have' and 'help were' lower the grammar score significantly. Pay closer attention to singular and plural subjects.Impact: High
  2. 2Avoid Sentence FragmentsIncomplete sentences such as 'While explaining that...' disrupt grammatical cohesion and lower your score.Impact: Medium
  3. 3Upgrade Vocabulary and CollocationsReplacing informal expressions like 'a bunch of people' with precise academic alternatives will improve Lexical Resource.Impact: Medium

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 5.5

B2

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses both views regarding the impact of climate on lifestyle versus the economy and provides a clear opinion. However, it is marred by frequent grammatical errors, particularly subject-verb agreement mismatches ('climate have'), informal or imprecise vocabulary ('a bunch of people', 'poor pull of hobbies'), and punctuation/sentence boundary issues, including sentence fragments. Lexical range is adequate for a Band 5.5/6.0, but structural and grammatical inaccuracies prevent a higher score.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • Attempts complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions like 'while', 'although', and 'when'.

Weaknesses

  • Recurring subject-verb agreement errors ('climate have', 'No humanitarian help were').
  • Punctuation and sentence boundary errors, including sentence fragments ('While explaining that...') and comma splices.
  • Frequent minor errors such as missing articles ('the economy', 'the sunny days').

Justification

Grammatical errors are frequent, particularly with basic agreement and sentence structure, causing some strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 5.0.

Writing stats

Words
383
Paragraphs
4
Estimated time
3 min read
Grammar issues
10
Lexical suggestions
4
Major issues
6
Minor issues
13
Top error pattern
Subject-Verb Agreement Mismatch
Confidence
High