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Band 5.0CEFR B1Essay311 words

These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

The essay addresses both views and presents a clear personal opinion, but suffers from numerous grammatical errors, awkward collocations, spelling mistakes, and repetitive sente...

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Prompt

These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Essay review

Annotated essay

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There is no denying the fact that studying is something crucial for students. While it is a commonly held belief that by some that it is better to learn online rather than attending classes, there is aslo an argument that studying in campus it is much better, and has it is own advantages. This essay will analyse this topic from both points and express my opinion.

On one hand, some people believe that online learning offer several benefits for the students. In other words, students now can study through online platforms, videos, and educational programs. They do not need to tavel every day to university or school. Students now can attend their classes in thier home, without being dressed well. Which bring comfortable, and gives beace of mindes.

In addition, online leactures is often cheap and does not require large amount of money.For example, individuals do not need to worry to pay for housing, public transportation, and expensive books. Which attract large number of people from different countries. Also sometimes universiteis offer free educational programs.

On the other hand, others argue that learnesr should attend their courses in the faculty. It is also possible to say that schools can offer mixed- learning, combining face-to-face classes with online leactures. Moreover, some people understand the information when they interact directly with teachers, and classmates. Furthermore, teachers can make the lessons more attractive, by offering online groups disscusing. For instance, students can work together in project, even if they are not in the same place. This will improve social skills and teamwoork.

In conclusion, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, I tend to believe that both of the methods are good, and learning by the internert can make the work faster, and solve difficult questions. Also, by online lessons individuals can access information more easily, which save time and effort.

Improvement plan

Close to Band 6.0

Current Band 5.0

Target Band 6.0

  • Consistent control of simple and complex sentence structures without sentence fragments.
  • Accurate spelling and appropriate academic vocabulary without basic typographical errors.
  • More precise and varied cohesive devices beyond repetitive introductory linkers.

Strengths

Task Response

The introduction clearly outlines the intent to discuss both views and state a personal opinion, establishing a roadmap for the essay.

Weaknesses

Frequent Grammatical and Punctuation Lapses

High

The essay contains numerous errors in article usage, preposition selection, sentence boundaries (fragments starting with 'Which'), and subject-verb agreement.

Spelling and Collocation Errors

Medium

Frequent spelling mistakes across common academic and everyday words, alongside unnatural word combinations, reduce lexical precision.

Mechanical Cohesion and Sentence Fragments

Medium

Reliance on repetitive sentence-initial linkers and frequent isolated relative clauses ('Which bring...') disrupt the flow of information.

Priority improvements

  1. 1Eliminate Sentence Fragments and Improve SubordinationThe essay frequently uses 'Which' to start fragmented clauses. Connecting these clauses properly will significantly improve grammatical range and coherence.Impact: High
  2. 2Enhance Spelling and Word Choice AccuracyNumerous basic spelling mistakes ('aslo', 'tavel', 'thier', 'beace', 'leactures', 'universiteis', 'learnesr', 'internert') lower the lexical score and distract the reader.Impact: Medium
  3. 3Improve Subject-Verb AgreementRecurring errors in verb endings after singular or plural subjects ('online leactures is', 'which save') need careful attention.Impact: Medium

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 5.0

B1

Confidence: High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses both views and presents a clear personal opinion, but suffers from numerous grammatical errors, awkward collocations, spelling mistakes, and repetitive sentence structures. The lexical range is limited, and several sentences are fragmented or ungrammatical, particularly involving relative clauses and prepositional phrases.

Scoring criteria

Strengths

  • Attempts some complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions ('While it is...', 'even if they are...').

Weaknesses

  • Frequent grammatical errors including subject-verb agreement mismatches ('online leactures is'), article misuse ('studying in campus'), and sentence fragments ('Which bring comfortable...').
  • Widespread control issues across simple and complex structures.

Justification

Errors are frequent and occasionally cause strain for the reader, with simple sentences often more reliable than attempted complex structures, justifying a Band 4.5.

Writing stats

Words
311
Paragraphs
5
Estimated time
3 min read
Grammar issues
11
Lexical suggestions
4
Major issues
22
Minor issues
10
Top error pattern
Frequent Spelling Errors
Confidence
High